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Changes make her go wild
screaming pain out to the deaf world
crazy thoughts stir the untamed mentality of her known
she's a walking lunatic in her stormy zone
wash away the uncold tears, please
sickening every idea that there is something left in this world to seize.
her body is cold as stone
time has left her behind
rage burns through her veins like gasoline
she's trapped in her mind
that sick memory stuck on rewind.
screaming pain out to the deaf world
crazy thoughts stir the untamed mentality of her known
she's a walking lunatic in her stormy zone
wash away the uncold tears, please
sickening every idea that there is something left in this world to seize.
her body is cold as stone
time has left her behind
rage burns through her veins like gasoline
she's trapped in her mind
that sick memory stuck on rewind.
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Hannah Podhorsky November 18, 1992-February 1 2009
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Very thoughtful. There was some great word usage. I would maybe change teh word "pain" in the second line to sometethig stornger and more impacting. And while it's a line that the poem needs you should try to word "her body is cold as stone time has left her behind" teh second part is okay, but teh cold in stone is super cliche. I really liked the alst line it was very, repulsive and engaging at the same time. Good work. My regards to the family of Hannah, such a young life.